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Betrayed by my answer to it all,
The sweet burning playing on my lips,
They aren't my lips,
They are yours,
And I knew that!.

I used to talk of trust,
Lies,
Lust,
I never thought I'd eat my own words,
Never thought I'd be the one to hurt!.

Judged a book by its cover,
I was a fool to my own arrogance,
My ignorance,
No saint,
I've made a huge mistake!.

Betrayed by one huge flaw,
A bitter burning chewing my heart,
I love you
I'm so sorry
Lets go back to the start!.

One day I hope to regain your trust,
You beautiful being of mine,
I'll look after you
And hold you
For the rest of my time!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This poem is much better than most poetry written by a non-professional!. However, it doesn't really pop off the page!. Love poetry is notoriously difficult to make interesting simply because so much love poetry already exists in the world!. I would suggest you keep working on this poem, and over time you can personalize it and make it deeper and more interesting!. As it is, the poem is like candy!. Yummy, pretty, and sweet, but not much lasting benefit from eating it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it!. its open yet personal!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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