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Question: Is this real poetry!? Elaine asked we write real poetry!.!?
Elaine

I close my eyes and see you there,
Like in a photograph!.
A smile is creeping up your face,
You are about to laugh!.

I see you standing on a hill,
The top is nearly flat!.
The bluebirds sit atop your head,
Just like a store-bought hat!.

Your crimson hair about your head,
In sunlight shines of red!.
Your jaded eyes so clear and bright,
Pulls my gaze from your head!.

The trees so tall, behind you stand,
The leaves are emerald green!.
The lovely visage of you there,
Is more than I have seen!.

I see the pretty butterflies,
Of orange and of black!.
I see the fields of flowers, wild,
I see a large haystack!.

As night descends upon this land,
A radiance do I see,
It outshines all the stars and moon,
It shines out to the sea!.

The fireflies sit within your hair,
And blink their love for you!.
And all the world should see your face,
The way that I now do!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes!. This is what I meant!.

Love the title of your poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think!.!.!.join the first verse and the last verse together
to create a wonderful little poem!.!.!.!.the other verses are fine (I love the two lines - bluebirds and store-bought hat) but they lack the wistful poignancy of those two perfect verses!.
On second thoughts, make it a three verse poem

First, last but one and the last verse!.



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Oh Donders, (Can I call you Donders!?) yes, this IS what she meant and I'm very glad to have read it!.
Beautiful as always!.

*Aside to Elaine: We all hafta get a little goofy sometimes, you know!? Now, about that glass of wine!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, this is real!. She might smile, it's so good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

As real as it comes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Damn, Dondi, you had to go and ruin it with something real AND good, didn't you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Dondi, You always say just the right things!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

There you go getting all mushy again! lol G1Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, very real! I'm sure she she is laughing with tears of joy!Www@QuestionHome@Com