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Question: Who likes the poem I wrote!?
I don't usually write poems but I was in a mood we'll say!. Its about a girl I loved and thought loved me but she randomly stopped talking to me and I made multiple efforts but oh well im almost over it!. Kinda in the "Your loss" stage!. K now the poem


Notice

Notice I don't call anymore
And Notice I don't write

Notice I don't try anymore
Cause it's not worth the fight

Notice that im doing fine
I notice you don't care

I notice that as the reason why
we would never make a pair

Did you notice I didn't say hi
When I saw you around

Even if I had approached you,
Would you have noticed my sound!?

You may not notice me
But I notice you there

But its not worth my time
To even stop and stare

So I hope you notice me
When you see me smile

With the one person who noticed
That I was worth their whileWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really liked this! You conveyed your emotions fantastically (I thought) the only advice I would give is to work on the forth stanza!. It is a little confusing!? Maybe just a typing error!? Keep up the good work! Is it supposed to be, "I notice that IS the reason why'!? Or am I reading wrong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this was really good! i usually hate love poems or lost-love poems, but this one actually kept me reading!. really great job on this!. you should write poetry more often!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice! I like the end the most!. It's like BOOYA MOFKR!! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

=( Smile!? )=

=) <- My smile
:) <- Your Smile

You got small eyes
I got big eyes
I like to eat riceWww@QuestionHome@Com