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Question: Rate my poem 1-10, about breaking up with my boyfriend!?
Last night I wrote this poem, it's about breaking up with my boyfriend because he's becoming mean to me and doesn't seem to want to be with me, but I still want him so bad!.



Steven, my love, I just wanted to say,
You make me happy every day!.
I love looking into your eyes,
It makes me forget about the times we cried!.
I'll always love you, but my heart has hate,
The things I've done, I thought you'd appreciate!.
All good things must come to an end,
But at least I can still be a really close friend!.
I always thought I could be the one,
But I can't because of a few things I've done!.
All those days and all the memories,
Good or bad, they'll forever be a part of me!.
I can't seem to get you voice out of my head,
The words you've spoken and the things that you said!.
Everywhere I look I imagine your face,
A wonderful picture I'd never replace!.
Whenever I saw the tears on your cheek,
It only made me feel more weak!.
I still remember the feeling of hugging you,
And the times I held your soft hands, too!.
Sometimes I can randomly smell your scent,
And I wonder where all the good times went!.
Being with out means everything,
I shouldn't have given up that easily!.
I wish I could go back and undo every mistake,
None of my apologies were ever fake!.
No one in the world is as perfect as you,
Now there's so many things we can not do!.
Steven, my love, I just want you to know,
My feelings for you will forever show!.
So after you find everything you'd ever need,
I hope you still remember me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
very good, 8Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good, 9/10 for your age
6/10 for general poetry (needs some editing)Www@QuestionHome@Com

13 is a bit young but I guess you can't stop love!.!.!.good poem thoughWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow um im 13 too!.!.!.
I just don't think you need to keep calling him "Steven my love"
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I think you need to work on the part where you say you still have hate!. Is that really what you meant or are you using it just to rhyme!? It doesn't seem to go with the rest of the poem!. Think about it, and see if there isn't a more accurate way to describe those negative feelings!. also, the line "No one in the world is as perfect as you" is a little over the top!. If he were perfect he would forgive your mistakes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com