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Question: What do you think ---- quick 10 points ---- thanks everyone!!?
hey, i'm 15 and i am writing a poem for my mum for her birthday!. I am trying to tell her how i feel, and i want it to make her cry with happyness!. that is my goal!.

Which should i use to start it off!?




START # 1

You gave me life
I will never forget
The undeniable love
From when we met



OR



START # 2

You gave me life
I will never forget
The undeniable love
From when we met





Which one is better, more personal!.!.!.!.!.!. it's meant to be talking about my birth and seeing eachother for the first time!.


thanks everyone!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You gave me life
I will never forget
The undeniable love
From my very first breath!.!.
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Answer no !. 1# Sounds very endearing and thoughtful

But then again also answer no!. 2# Sounds true to the Point

Wait a minute !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. Hold everything !
Are they both saying the same thing!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

You gave me life when I almost gave up,
I will never forget how you saved my hopes,
The undeniable love full of colours,
From when we met I knew we meant for each other,


thats more like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

You gave me life
I will never forget
The undeniable love
From my very first breath!.!.

I like this one posted by Saint!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

They are the same 1 and 2!. But Ilove them!.!.!.!.really deep!.!.!.!.really good!
Your off to a great start!.!.!.remember to post the rest so I can read it! Www@QuestionHome@Com

You took my life
In a terrible net
Unfry-able fish
But, hey, that's what you get!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is a beautiful start- but I don't see the difference in the choices!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

they are both the same
maybe u pasted it 2 timesWww@QuestionHome@Com