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Question: My poems !. wat do u think!? !?
wellllll
i like to write
ill admit im not great, i actually kinda suck
but its a passion of mine and i love to do it

to me they sound more like lyrics but oh well
and yes these are poems about heartbreak but to me they mean so much more
please no rude comments

The New Me :


Giving up is the hardest thing to do
Forgetting is the only way to make it
Take my heart
And please don’t break it
Cause

Im Giving Up And Starting Over
Its A New Beginning
A new chapter
Im Not Going To Pretend Im ok
You'll See The Real Side Of Me
Only today and never forever

The odds are , never right
Taking chances is the only way to win this fight
Hold your head up high
Take a bow and realise

Im Giving Up And Starting Over
Its A New Beginning
A new chapter
Im Not Going To Pretend Im ok
You'll See The Real Side Of Me
Only today and never forever

Tomorrow is a new day
Things will be ok
You’ll soon realise that your beautiful
Your heart , your soul , those precious pale blue eyes
Please , just take a bow and realise

Im Giving Up And Starting Over
Its A New Beginning
A new chapter
Im Not Going To Pretend Im ok
You'll See The Real Side Of Me
Only today and never forever
Wake up , you’ll see , that this is the new me


The Guillotine:

You're love was a death sentence
& i never really got out
Step up & taken what’s given
Your prisons & your expectations

Step up to the guillotine
you stand alone , awaiting death
whispering her name
step up to the guillotine
your time is up

Satisfied
i changed , but you , never got close enough
The truth , is far , but you , decide
your happiness , your fate
permission to take chances

Step up to the guillotine
you stand alone , awaiting death
whispering her name
step up to the guillotine
your time is up

next time , you'll change
things will be different
your death but the guillotine


&&
It’s My Time To Shine :

Ill take this knife , and lunge it in your throat
Black blooded , faint hearted , cruel intentions
the cruel spectators of this bloody mess
Watch and wait
Your time is up

The hurt
The un appreciation
The guilt u made me feel inside
The bruises
The fears
Now is your time to die

And you
are the one that made me this way,
with u in my life, all the games that were played!.
made me think and made me believe but no
being hurt is my new pet peeve

The guilt
The lies
The anxiety takes control
The love
The life
Now if your time to die

Watch and wait
The lies and fate
Now is your turn to feel the pain
Ill take control
You’ll just wait and see
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Oh wow,I never felt that way!.Being a mostly heartbreak poet myself,I can just see the sheer beauty of the poems!.And you are wrong,you don't suck!.
Your passion is ripe and is at the crucial stages,and,poetry is a tool for the soul,to express feelings,not to impress someone!.
Yes,the most important feelings in life are love,happiness,heartbreak,betrayal and shame!.I feel the last three emotions more strongly than the others !.And reading them exactly as the mind describes it is perhaps the best way to actually feel it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

these poems don't suck they are actually quite good,
some of them rime and sound good,
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Hey Friend! I think that your Poems Really do stand out(they don't Suck!)!. Not only from how they got the rhyming going with it, but the real inspiration that thus, speaks out the Truth about the hurt, the pain and the eternal damage caused in the situation and strength to take! Keep it up cause it definitely shares a million's silent cries!Www@QuestionHome@Com

well hey u r more than billion, trillion , times better!.!.!.!.

checkout my poem!.!.i wrote in 5 min!. so it sucks alot alot lot
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You know what!?
I felt like I've been through these times when i read it!. For real i haven't but just reading it made me feel like that!. And you know what else!? Thats what makes a good writer!. I absolutely love it!. I hope other people take their time to read it cause they will find it wonderful!.
Good luck with the writing ,
x

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