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Question: Here is another piece for Emmy's book for Christmas, do you have any suggestions to make it better!?
Six Months Old-An Emmy Poem
by C!.S!. Scotkin
Emmy has a tooth,
She’s trying to stand up
She’s eating real food
She has a sippy cup!.
She’s finally growing hair
She has her Mommy’s grin
She really grabs for toys
With vigor and with vim!
She swims across dry land
She can chew her toes
How she gets her foot so high,
Heaven only knows!
Six months old, what a joy!
Her grandma has such pride,
Then I noticed, with much awe
Emmy has my eyes!.
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Nope, no suggestions whatsoever! When she is old enough to have this read to her, she is going to be delighted!. I bet it will become one of those 'Read it again, Grandma' things!.
Just one thing!.!.!.!.this is perfect for Emmy, but with a couple of small changes would suit any child (for when you get a book publishing contract)
Baby has a tooth
and
Then she notices, with much awe
Baby has her eyes
Lovely stuff!.
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Why not try to make this more of a nursery rhyme type of poem!. Here is an idea!.
Emmy Emmy, tipsy turvy
standing falling, standing falling
swimming too swimming free
across the land across the world
Emmy Emmy smiley smiling
grabbing toys, grabbing toys
and chewing toes, chewing toes
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I love it! I wouldn't change a word!.
Congratulations! This time goes so fast, it is wonderful that you are keeping track of it through your poems!. One day it will mean she will always know you, always touch you, and know how much you love her!.tWww@QuestionHome@Com
This is very cute!. Emmy will cherish this as she grows older!. You can add her picture to the poem to make it even more special!. Be sure to laminate it so it will last forever!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's a nice poem for a nice granddaughter!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Perfectly amazing!.!. i love it!.!. she will be so proud you take so much pride in her as i do my own grandaughter!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Crying, just crying!.!.!.!.This is perfectly delightful!Www@QuestionHome@Com
AWW!. Very nice just as it is!. I wish I could bring my toes to my head!.Www@QuestionHome@Com