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Question: What should I do if one fine day I get to Mars!? Would you comment on my poem!?
I placed this benign little verse in response to a question last night and was promptly blocked by the questioner!. What objections do you find with my verse!?

If one fine day I get to Mars
Will I write poems as well
As one who every effort bars
Unvarnished truths to tell!.

Would I be better than I am
Or would I be quite worse
And if the former would you dam
My honeyed stream and curse!.

Or would you then forgive my sins!? --
I know not what I've done!.
On Earth the pure of spirit wins,
With that I'm sure you'll run!.

You've sold your soul to fantasy
There is no Golden Dome --
There's only just this place you see
The one that you call home!.

But you are compensated yet
For trips that you might miss;
Just think of all the folks you've met
And then remember this:

One played with numbers, not with love,
'Twas all truth you were told!.
The hawk you know; what of the dove,
If I may be so bold!.

I love this world, I think I'll stay,
Where everything is real!.
I'll think of you when you're away
That much I will reveal!.

But if you ever miss a beat
And if I lend a hand
Just listen please and don't retreat
Just take it in and stand

Prepared to take that simple gift
That's given free and clear
Because forgiveness knows no rift --
And life is so, so dear!.

Do you think the questioner is perhaps being a bit melodramatic since I have only offered practical advice in the name of a higher principle!? I'd like to know what your thoughts are on such behavior!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Been to Mars, didn't like it!.!.!.no atmosphere!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

huh!? sorry, not completely sure what you are asking!.
i like it!
also, i don't get why the user blocked you- that makes no sense!.!.!.
what was the question, though!?

-MeiWww@QuestionHome@Com

A foolish waste of time!. The confrontation and the objection!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Lets see!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. Hmmmmm!.!.!.!.!.Someone lost in the Wilds
A CROSS DRESSING FAG
And a MOUTH

Innocent enough!.!.!.!.!.!.!. Until you put them all togetherWww@QuestionHome@Com

Considering the company you would meet there, you might want to bring a poetry book because outside of you no one else there would be able to write any!. They are a joke, we all know that; even they must know it!. In truth, they would do us all a favor by leaving, but they can't!. Who ever said God doesn't have a sense of humor!.!.!. and an ironic one at that!. MD needs to grow up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com