Another poetry question that no one wants to answer!... but please?

Question: Another poetry question that no one wants to answer!!.!.!. but please!?

Be mean!. "cute" or "lame" isn't really constructive!. I just need a couple sentences with your thoughts!.!. thanks!

AUTUMN

Catch me!.
Please!?
I’d rather turn limp in your hands
Than be crushed,
brown and brittle on the ground
Under your shoe!.

Autumn is cruel,
But who are you to criticize
The beautiful season
If you won’t even catch
A dying leaf

Like me!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Catch
me, please!?
I’d rather turn limp
in your hands
than be crushed brown
and brittle on the ground
under your shoe!.

Autumn is cruel,
But who are you
to criticize
the beautiful season
if you will not catch
a dying leaf

Like me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It doesn't seem complete!. You started off with an expression of wanting to be caught and recognized as special and then you ended it by just saying your life is over!.

More lines to further expound on why you should be caught and maybe even why it would be a good idea to preserve you for more autumns to come!.

Original but needs more lines!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

My opinion is that your poem is interesting and surprising in its form and wording but needs more depth in its subject!. I think the first stanza is very good and promises more than the second one delivers!. Technically, I think you have the means to make some very good poems and will undoubtedly do so!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

You have the idea!.!. listen to what Buk said and you will rock n roll!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it !. maybe alittle bit more detail i know theres some in there but detail always helps a poem :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

Not sure what you really want people to say about it, but i liked it!. its kinda dark!.Www@QuestionHome@Com