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Question: HELLO; What do you think of this poem/song!?
I thought you were my friend,
I thought you could understand,
You knew I felt so worthless,
You know I felt this pain,
I thought you were perfect,
I thought you could see through my mistakes,
You knew I was never fake,
You know now I feel being put on your list for pity!.
Well…
Guess what!?
I don't care anymore
Guess what!?
I don’t need your cruel games
Guess what!?
You took away everything I stood for
Guess what!?
I am sinking in a puddle of pain
Guess what!?!.!.!.
I'm stuck in your karma- debt in vain…
In vain…
I thought you stood up for me,
I thought you understood,
You knew you could use me,
You knew you could say sorry,
I thought everything would be fine,
I thought I would remain on the vine,
You knew I would come to realize,
You knew I would be fair- no turning back to patronize…
Well…
Guess what!?
I don't care anymore
Guess what!?
I don’t need your cruel games
Guess what!?
You took away everything I stood for
Guess what!?
I am sinking in a puddle of pain
Guess what!?!.!.!.
I'm stuck in your karma- debt in vain…
In vain…
Now enough has been said,
Now you are forever in MY debt!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
guess what!? you deserve the purest form of flattery!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Whoa! Put that person in their place!!! Real good!!! Wouldn't want to be whoever you're writing about!
Gloria Gainer's song, "I Will Survive" kept popping in my head while reading this!.!.!.!.'just turn around now, cause I don't want you anymore!.!.!."
Good onyer!Www@QuestionHome@Com
one word!. b e a utiful!.!.and sad!. if you ever present this, put feeling into it and maybe shed some tears, and try not to laugh either, thats whats going to get the people into and and they WILL shed tears along with you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You have a strong bridge that is hard to read over and over, but works when sung to music meant just for it!. It's a good poem, and will fit well with your tune!.!.!.whatever it may bet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!. I would say that it is very realistic!. Good work!. Do me a favor and review my poem, please!. I have post it on Yahoo Answers!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
awesome i can see this becoming a song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Boring, juvenile, typical, uncreative, no possible meter!. Do you even know what 'in vain' means!? Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow! Strong & tender & touching!. Beautifully done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Great except for this karma word , it just don't fitWww@QuestionHome@Com
nice poem, u did a good job!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Touching!.
Im going to show this to my friend!.!.!. Hope u dont mind!.
Coz this poem's exactly what she needs right now!. The way shes treating me!.!.!.!.!.
Ur poem moistened my eyes!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com