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Question: I wrote a (kind of) controversial poem (I'm not a writer, at all) and I'd like to know what others think!?
Mommy, it’s been 4 months!
It’s been so long since that special date,
Only 5 more months, Mommy, and I can’t wait!.
Today, I am a whole 4 months old!
I call myself Sophie and my hair is gold
I have green eyes, and little toes
Tiny ears and a small button nose
I’m growing fast and my hearts beating loud
Oh, mommy you’re going to be so proud
I want to travel with you, to New York and to the shore
I can’t wait until I’m yours to adore
So mom, where are we going today!?
Wait, the doctor!? That’s not until Tuesday
Mommy, who’s he!? I don’t know him!
No, not this! Did he say limb by limb!?
I love you mommy, I love you!
Are you mad, what did I do!?
I’m so sorry, mommy, please forgive me
I’ll make it up to you, you’ll see
Just not this, I want to live!
You won’t believe the love I have to give
I love you more than you can know
Please, mommy, please, don’t make me go
I feel it now, the doctor’s here
And if I could cry, you’d see my tears
I don’t know why you hate me, mommy, but it’s okay
Because I want you to be happy, even if that means I can’t stay
So don’t worry about me, I’ll get through this
Even though I know that I won’t be missed
I’m losing life, and going to god in the sky
So I guess, mommy, this is goodbye!.
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Yes it is controversial, but appropriate!. It'll have a ready audience, because there are many who oppose abortion!. Sophie is an appropriate title, the name means "Wisdom"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is obviously about abortion!. Heartbreaking !.- especially at the end!.!.!.but I think very well done!. You make the baby seem real by describing her and giving her a name!. (also I think God should be capitalized!.)
Possible titles: Sophie; Goodbye Sophie; Mommy, please don't make me go!.
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Interesting theme neatly expressed!. For a title this makes me think of Unknown Love, or Unknown Life!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like the message - that you are trying to convey!. By writing this - from the child's point of view - adds the ultimate personalization emotion of survival!. Well done and I hope the message is received - loud and clear!. Title - how 'bout - "Child's Dream" - too bad "Childhood's End" is already taken ?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Your poem is very good, and very sad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
abortion is a controversial topic!. i shall write about it from the other perspective!. nice poem anyway!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its great
carry onWww@QuestionHome@Com