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Question: PLEASE!!!! Give me feedback on the poem that just came to me!.!?
Life’s a Double-Edged Sword

Life’s a double-edged sword

Never to be left in one’s own hand
Its control ever-changing like shifting sand
In sheath of one unskilled
Life is quickly stilled

Life’s a double-edged sword

With unswung blade love ends in plight
With misplaced stroke many feel death’s sight
One edge brings happiness the other sorrow
Flames reflecting on its blade, an ominous glow

Life’s a double-edged sword

Yet in life’s endless darkness light can come anew
The hand of one who cares, to wield life’s sword with you
Time and time again Fellow swords shall clash
But with love received from others,
Life’s sword shall rise from ashWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very deep and !.!.!.interesting its something that you don't hear very often you hear it rarely, you have much potential!. You have to really read it just to understand it it took me a few tries to understand it i asked my aunt to read it and she said that there are a few different ways you can look at it!. Beautiful job!.

Could you answer my question maybe, anyone!?http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I would have to say that I am officially a fan!. That is a very cool concept that I have never heard in a poem before!.
I really like the part where you say "with love recieved from others, life's sword shall rise from ash"
Lots of people seem to forget how important other people are in todays world!. I feel like with a person who truly loves you at your side, you can do anything!. Good relationships are stronger than anything!.Www@QuestionHome@Com