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Question: Will you comment on these five lines!?
From primal womb pours fantasy—reborn,
Spills shadow invented beneath another sun!.
There is a brightening time
Like turning toward a star
When ancient whisper reaches modern air!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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It's beautiful, really, pure beauty!.
Had to read it several times for it to soak in to give it the full worth it deserves!.

You speak in angel tongue!.

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From primal womb pours fantasy—reborn,
Spills shadow invented beneath another sun!.
There is a brightening time
Like turning toward a star
When ancient whisper reaches modern air!.

From primal womb

The world after the fall of Adam!.

pours fantasy—reborn,

Being born again has the joy of being so good it must be a fantasy!.
Reminded of Psalm 137:1 “By the rivers of Babylon, there we sat down, yea, we wept, when we remembered Zion!.”

Read the whole psalm

Spills shadow invented beneath another sun!.

The current sun is going to have a limit to its existence however the re-born person is eternal!. The relationship with the sun prior to his born-again state was changed after being born-again!.

Like turning toward a star

The star of Bethlehem, our spirits are turned towards the reality of a savior born like the three Wisemen

When ancient whisper reaches modern air!.

The same Divine voice that spoke to Samuel as a child and Elisha in the desert speaks to us today in the 21st century!.
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This is really fantastical!.!.!.
When ancient whisper reaches modern air!.!.!.it is what that happens in our hearts!.!.!.we hear the call of ancient poets, the primal womb of music and words!.!.!.on reaching our ears, at that brightening time of enlightenment, they inspire us to turn toward the star of poetry!.!.!.they inspire us to write!.!.!.to take that beautiful pen of antiquity!.
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What have we here before me!? What appears to be a hybrid between a Sonnet and a non-rhyming Limerick!. A Limmeret(!?) or perhaps a Sonnick!? Whichever, this is a delightful piece of thought-provoking beauty!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

So much in five lines! Primordial rebirth from one universe to another!. My kind of poetry, and you wound ALL up in five, little lines!.!.!.you, madam are Sighted!
Well done, well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com

These five lines are a brightening time, like turning towards a star!. A wise person said that!. That wise person is YOU Amy G! Great work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Lovely 5 lines evoking dream scenes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love any writing that challenges the imagination and this does!.
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So many have answered your question with details about the beauty that I feel as if I am the last to discover this treasure!.

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wow!.!.!.!.wow!.!.!.!.wowWww@QuestionHome@Com

Yup!.!.!.there's definitely five of them!. Glad that's cleared up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Wow I have trouble reading that!. I kind of like simple rhyming things like that!. 3 stars outta 5Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry but I have no idea what you are talking about, makes no sense to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

beautiful, Absolutely!.makes me think of reincarnationWww@QuestionHome@Com

MORE PLEASE !.!.!.!.MORE!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com