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Question: A flux of "father" poems today, may I share mine again!?
Military Pomp and Circumstance
Ushered to crisp linen-backed folding chairs
reserved just for family, front row seats,
emptied hangar now filled not with planes
but men in uniform at attention to my fore,
flags standing tall in a line behind them!.
Rehearsed Navy band to the side patiently waits
for traditional pomp and circumstance to commence
this military ceremony honoring their station's
beloved Commanding Officer, my father!.
We sit so straight as trained to do, feeling warm
eyes burning into the backs of our necks,
my own still burning from last night's shame!.
"You represent me and will be watched by the crowd,
remember that and behave accordingly," he warned!.
The Captain smartly strides his way to the stage in full
dress whites as per proclaimed uniform of the day,
shoulders squared, head erect, his cover starched, placed
with visor exactly parallel and two inches above brows!.
He begins his speech full of praise for his troops,
politically correct in noting not his own importance!.
Chest weighted down, multiple rows of colorful
medals betray his futile attempts at humility!.
Sharp salutes exchanged in respect as yet another
award presentation concludes for this highly admired man,
this man who just the night before yet again showed at my
door, who ordered me to his bed and did things to this nine
year old for which I'm quite sure no medals are earned!.
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This deserves to receive recognition by the poetry world at large!.!.!.I hope that has already happened!. If not, post if on Poemhunter and any other site which accepts poems on line!.
It is truly one of the best poems I've read on this site, for a number of reasons, because of; its powerful pictorial quality, it's immaculately structured story-line, the rhythm of it and most of all because of its raw honesty!.
(It is like looking at a Norman Rockwell painting and then noticing something you'd missed before that the smiling child in the foreground has tears in her eyes)!. Very moving, ma!.
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I expressed my disgust the first time I read this -he should have been led off in handcuffs rather than honored!. My father was the opposite -a man who spent his military service instructing recruits on the firing range and never setting foot on a battlefield, but a hero of a father who loved his children and did everything for their benefit!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
I-I cried!. This is amazing, immense passion emits from this piece of writing!. It amazes me how words can be so powerful!. And my sister is in the Navy, currently touring in Camp Bucca, Iraq!.!. It's really hard for a 13 year old to deal with it, but I also vent with my poetry!. Well, I'm rambling off subject, so just wanted to say this is a beautiful piece!. BRAVO!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Oh my dear lady, I can relate only too well!. The nights spent staring at the doorknob, waiting for it to turn, then the silhouette!. You are a triumph over evil in and of your self, that self which is nurturing, compassionate, and strong!. Your sense of humor is its own victory!. I admire and cherish your words!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Mate!! I dont really know what to say but where I come from a decent bloke dont do this or even think it!. We would tend to have a wee chat with this person, ps wee chat has nothing to do with talking
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how terribly sad!. i can only imagine the horror of that childhood!. i'm so blessed to have the most wonderful dad in the world!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I still shake in rage when I read this, the very first I ever read of yours!.
I don't think I ever read a poem so visceral, so powerful on this subject!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
At least mine was not physical!.!.!.but mental and emotional!. Presenting it, as you have (I did read it the first time) aids in cleansing!.!.!.does it not!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I have no words that would describe the pain I feel for you!.Be strong!.He will be punished someday, someway!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
WOW! I don't even know how too answer this, MaWww@QuestionHome@Com
Whatever life can bring to any of us, nothing, absolutely nothing can compare to such facts as you suggest!. For such things the death penalty is; and if there isn't ALL OF US are to be blame as well, and we really are to be blame!.
My astute mother was all alone for more than 18-year just to be absolutely sure she keeps me out of any danger!.
Only mothers can sacrifice them self!? Why are some ones wondering about the women acting strongly like men!?
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I've walked your path, only I was much younger and it was my grandfather from 2-4!. I do not know how you coped!. I created other "people" and left so that nothing happened to me, only to my disassociated identities!.
Your poem is powerful!. It takes me back where I do not want to go, so come, take my hand, and let us leave the lack of childhood behind!.
Your freedom is great for you can write about it!. This will help others!. I know -- it just opens doors for those who still hide this dark aspect of their life!.
You are an amazing poet, woman, Christian and I am glad to know you as well as we can!.
T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com