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Question: Would you care to comment on this poem, a short tragedy!?
The Artist
by C!.S!. Scotkin

At an easel the artist sits,
gentle damaged soul
within and out,
pain crazed, smiles,
a new attempt, scrapes
brightness from a canvas!.

Fifty years trying
not to whimper in corners,
dodging sharp angles,
splattered hurled venom,
seeking his Gift under
empty rum bottles!.

The cost is not yet full exacted
but soon, I fear!.
Thins his paint and mind
with spirits until all goes
to muddy gray!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's a shame that there ae so many artists that are not recognized because they either fell in a bottle or fell on a needle and some of their greatest works are still the ones yet to come,,,,,Never to be seen / scene again,,,,
,,,,What a shame,,,,, What a shameWww@QuestionHome@Com

A little under-punctuated but nice!. I get pictures of what you are seeing coming through well!.

Instead of

At an easel the artist sits,
gentle damaged soul
within and out,
pain crazed, smiles,
a new attempt, scrapes
brightness, from a canvas

how about

At an easel the artist sits,
gentle damaged soul
within and out;
pain crazed, smiles!.
A new attempt scrapes
brightness from a canvas!.


Good observations!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good, as an ex-painter (ex, because I was no good), I understand some of the frustrations and expectations of the artist as he/she attempts to put their heart and soul on a piece of canvas with nothing but colors!. I try to paint with words now, for it is infinitely easier!. I wrote a poem years ago as a tribute to a friend who paints beautiful pictures when she isn't working as a nurse in a final care facility!. I posted it long ago, maybe I'll post it again soon!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wonderful - but, what else from you as you ride this creative wave!?

Van Gogh came to mind, but any shunned, ignored artist would fit this bill!.

I think what makes this one of your special verses is the juxtaposition of reality, with imagery!.!.!. co-existing in the context of painting!.

Now we need to see another verse - this time expressing the pain, rejection and sheer frustration of being an undiscovered poetic genius and what that does to the soul!.!.!.I think I am joking, but maybe a tiny grain of truth there!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!. I came to this after an honest fatherly post!.!.!.sounds just like him! My father hates, no longer drinks, but still has the "control" issues!.!.!.I love my Dad, I just don't like him!. Does that make sense!?

Your poem speaks to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A nice snapshot of a frustrated artist driven to drink by his art!. I can easily relate!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice and i feel the frustrations!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Tis' sad, the amount of wonder lost in the bottom of a bottle!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Gifts are not always gifts!.Www@QuestionHome@Com