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Question: Is This Good!?!? I Need Honest Answers!?
Okay so I wrote a poem, didn't really think about it or plot it out, I just want to know if it's good or not!.!.
I want honest opinions, so if you don't like it, then be harsh with me!. I need open criticism that's the only way I'll ever get better!.
If you see anything that needs improvement, then let me know!. Thanks!.


I Can't

There are days that I want to jump out of my skin,
And days that I just want to pretend,
That everything will always be okay,
But I know that's not happening today,

Cause when you look at me with fury in your eyes,
It makes my veins freeze like ice,
You drop me and I shatter on the ground,
It pains me to know you're not around,

I don't know that I can believe you now,
Because even if I wanted, I just don't know how,
The words you released course through my head,
But I think the truth in them are dead,

You told me that you would always care,
But when I came home, you weren't there,
You left me without an explanation or clue,
I'm stuck here debating on what to do,

I thought you were mine, that it would never end,
But you took my love and you made it bend,
All I wanted was for you to try,
But it all turned out to be a lie,

So now I'm not sure what to say,
Because you're always running away,
From the light in which I stand,
I want to follow you, but I know I can't!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I don't know why nobody has answered this question, but your poem is great!

I really liked it!. It wasn't rushed, yet it kept my attention all the way through!. Kudos!Www@QuestionHome@Com