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Question: A poem i wrote!. comments/suggestions/ratings etc!?

no treaty but trenches
no comfort
sacrifice
no home
in no man's landWww@QuestionHome@Com

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A little overly zealous for my liking!. Hated it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its like our visit to a forlorn isolated beach good effort keep it going and words flowing

!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.ON THE BEACH!.!.!.!.

I saw them running around hand in hand ,
They were two boys,
On the other side I saw,
Two teenagers,in their bikinis,

Looked at other signs of their associations,
Alas sad to say, I found none!.
I moved on and took mine along,
to the other side!.

When this one did a smile fling
I looked around she was a thing,
Then I saw what I thought I did,
The two boys clasped, yes not gasped,
They moved away and so did we!.

We ran into the water and did not care,
The twins did at us stare,
We blushed and smiled as they smiled back,
We were in our jeans and they without,
We wondered why they laughed at us!.
Guess what we were at the wrong beach,

It was only for the nudist youth,
We were out of sync I came to know,
We were out far into the sandy waters,
And there we thought of stripping so,
But shy as we felt we could not do,
Can you guess,who was by then,who with who!? Www@QuestionHome@Com