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Question: Hey everyone!.!. short poem!.!.!.!. please read!.!.!. comment!.!.!. Thankyou!?
“Loosing my angel”

Standing there
Without a sound
Gently swaying
Collapsed to the ground

Struggling to live
Can’t take a breath
Lying on the ground
Ending with death

Tears streamed
Grief was around
The words unspoken
Sadness was the sound


I'm 15 and wrote this about 5 mins ago!. It is sort of just a draft, not sure yet!.!.!.!. what do you think!?!?

*The poem is made up, it did not really happen*Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
WHATEVER! Don't listen to haters! they don't know what their talking about!.!.!. I really did like your poem, it reminds me of myself i write about dark things and no one expected it!.!. LOL, anyway!.!. keep on writing i wish i could rhyme like that! Good Work :)


~ AshleyWww@QuestionHome@Com

Nice! I take it that your a girl that write poems alot to express their feelings huh!?

Your poem really expresses the word 'sadness'Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow someone is slightly emo/goth! and if you dont know what that means its generally people who are obsessed with darkness, death, ect!.!.!.!. i agree with piggalaina please get therapyWww@QuestionHome@Com

I love it! For a first draft it's great!. I love poetry as well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

1/10Www@QuestionHome@Com

that's really scary get therapy pleaseWww@QuestionHome@Com