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Question: Despair and a coffee break for two of my fans !.please read and assess!.will u be kind to do so!? all r welcome!?


DESPAIR

My Love I wake up for your love dear,

I go to sleep,as dreams make me feel near,

And make me gain confidence that you're close,

In an imperfect world, we all unwantedly chose,


Yet when I awake I miss the warmth I craved,

My fantasy and imagination I so honestly braved,

And I fall back again from the stair,

My dear in utterly miserable, oh this, despair!.


My innate desire to spend a whole life,

As your dear lovelingly and only wife!.

Perhaps that was what you did always desire,

And the flame of fire in me, you did fire!.



I cannot imagine a day without your love, I say,

Crossing the path without a miss,a loving kiss,

For your warmth through your lips, so soft and sweet,

I thought these were my gift, a life's eternal treat!.



I miss your warmth and loving embrace,

I do not know when and how, I fell from grace!.

Your lovely look,youe eyes, and beautiful smile

I always possessed and will possess all the while!.


You are as always and shall for ever be,

The love of my years' that went before me!.

A life, a heart throb, a summer's cream,

For all times you are an indellibe dream!.


A welcoming whisper in the sands of hour,

You are as fragrant as many a flower,

Your looking away from me, I could never tolerate,

Remember this my love, whenever we did date!.


I cannot believe my ears,for what you did appear to say,

An intense feeling I want to hold, with a nay,

That you never said, what I thought I heard,

And incredibly deny to ever believe a word!.


What made you think I was just a playful toy,

Just to hold for a while and enjoy,

What made you think of me that so low,

Say it all was just not said ,let my heart glow!.



Just once, just once more, think about that small one,

And think of the part in me that has now begun!.

Think of our tomorrow and the next morrow,

Just for once take me out of this unbearable sorrow!.




Come back to me my life, my breath,my love ,

There is nothing left for me on earth or heaven above,

And come back to my arms once again,

My life, my very being, please do not leave me in vain!.


''HELLO CANADA''











FROM THE COFFEE SHOP

As I sat alone having coffee ,
I saw her passing by swiftly!.
I ran out,for I thought it is now or never,
To make a new friend on a coldest morning ever!.

I called her from far and yelled,
'HELLO HELLO'
There was no response, so I did her follow!.
Once gain I called at her,
She was unmindful!.
What the hell I said to myself ,
I ran ahead of her to stop her,
She smiled and smiled without response,
I wondered what she wanted to say,
'Hello' I said once more,
She was deaf for sure!.

I waived and returned back to my coffee shop,
My coffee, as she had, was also gone,
Alas I, she and coffee guy,
All to each other had to say,
Bye,bye,good bye!. Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
hey visionaryme,
how are you !?
im your fan now :)
i gotta comment : what you posted is a bit long but i like it ! and sounds like you are in love dear, congrats :))))) you say the words i felt for my man ,,,,,,, so you are doing a pretty good darn job ! but try to put stronger words to make your metaphors ROCK !

keep it up, dont die on me now ! lol you gotta be productive, i like that about u :))))) Www@QuestionHome@Com

holy crap that is way to long,
im sorry but is the truth, try to put less paragraphs
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