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Question: Rate this poem!.!.!.not with numbers but ur opinion!?
i posted this on here like 1 hour ago but i changed it twice now (for those who already read it) for those who haven't yet!.!.!.tell what u think!.
Crazy untamed heart,
your as dangerous as can be!.
You let me fall for some boy,
you'll be the death of me!.
Always leading me places,
where my head says not to go!.
Raising me to the sky,
and building up my hope!.
Telling me he's the one,
in a voice I have to hear!.
Knowing when it's over,
I'll end up in tears!.
Before you fall in love this time,
I just thought that you should know,
you better me more careful,
or one day you'll end up broke!.
When this is finally happening,
and your pieces are falling apart!.
I will say "I told you so"
crazy untamed heartWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
being neither hurtful or mean,,, you might want to pare this down a bit by removing some words that are really not necessary,,, you might consider adding a few more descriptive words as well,,, both will enhance the flow and meaning
if you are interested in options, read on,,, if not, then good day,,, no harm, no foul!.
Crazy untamed heart,
dangerous as can be,
letting me fall for some boy,
you'll be the death of me!.
Always leading me places,
where my head says no!.
raising me to the sky,
building up my hope so!.
Telling me he's the one,
your voice I wish I did not hear,
knowing when it's over,
I'll just end up one big tear!.
Before you fall in love this time,
I'd just like you to understand,
you better be more careful,
or you'll be in broken heart land!.
When this finally comes to pass,
shattered into pieces, falling apart,
I promise to say "I told you so",
crazy untamed heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
lol its a very funy poem but it gets to da heart,
i like to say well done
becoz it got me at mai heart!. lol omg i tried mai hardest lol but i really like ur poem, its creative and cute lol
later dayzWww@QuestionHome@Com
first words after i read this were: wow, ain't that the truth!. pardon my bad grammar but that was my first thought!. that was really good!. keep it up! i wouldn't change it though!. it's fine the way it is!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com
lovelY! sounds like it could be a song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this is a great poem! i understand exactly where you are coming with this!.!.!.!.!.!.you should write some more,!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i LOVE it!. it perfectly describes teenage love!.
And guess who I was thinking!? OF THIS GUY I WILL NEVER BE WITH!!!
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I enjoyed reading it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
That is so beautiful!. I loved it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com