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Question: The poem i wrote "Like Autumn loses colour" please comment!?
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Like Autumn leaves flee,
her tear drops flutter,
only now a bare!.!.!.bald tree,
the eyes dry she utter!.
Leaves once green now lye,
by salty tears and rain,
that fell till Autunm die,
but braches her tree retain!.

The idea i was trying to get across, was comparing the leaves falling from a tree to those of a women crying, as if the tears falling like leaves!. also comparing her to the leaves the tree lost, because the branches will soon be covered again!. Hope you got that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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I like the comparisons of falling leaves and tears!. You did a good job on the imagery of season and emotion; both are temporary and eventually they evolve into something new!.

Good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Bravo! You'r a poet and i did not know it!. Good job tho :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

once you understand it its really good! i think its pretty =)Www@QuestionHome@Com