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Question: Ok rate my poem so far!!?
Sitting here



Sitting here
By myself
Thinking of you

Sitting here
By myself
Taking in the view

Sitting here
By myself
No one to comfort me

Sitting here
By Myself
Never able to see

That outside
This window here
Is a world for me!.





What do you think!.

I actually seriously just wrote that off the top of my head in like 5 minutes! so it DEFINATLY needs lots and lots of work!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Your on to a good start except you should change the Sitting her by myself ' as you have to many of them' and it could be much better if you could use other words instead!.Use it on the first ' then make some other words for the poem and it will be a winner!.Your really on the right track!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The way you wrote it is fine!.!.!.only its a bit lame thinking about sitting by yourself feeling sorry for yourself, but if you are in junior high its great!Www@QuestionHome@Com

What is the purpose for using repetition!.!.!.!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

pretty good but i do agree w/ the person above me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com