Critique My New Poem: The Girls From Ghana?

Question: Critique My New Poem: The Girls From Ghana!?

The girls from Ghana
The girls from Nigeria
They seeking men
even far in Siberia
You seen them
on internet
on web dates
and single sites
with smiley faces
and seductive looks
they need men
to support them
they need sugar daddy
they need some body
to pay their bills
so watch badly
the girls from Ghana
the girls from Nigeria
Be careful
they may throw
their net at you
and catch you
like a little fish Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This is pretty good, a few things I might change in the wording!.!.!.!.!.

They're seeking men or they seek men, instead of they seeking men,
Even far away in Siberia, instead of even far in Siberia
You've seen them, instead of you see them,
they need a sugar daddy, instead of they need sugar daddy,
they need somebody, instead of they need some body,
so watch badly!? not sure if you mean: so watch cautiously!?

It's an interesting subject to write about!. I actually had to look up Ghana, since I had no idea where it was!.!.!.I learned something new today! Thank you!

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I like it!. Others will criticise it for not being politically correct, but ignore them!. Your poetry is not hateful, but it is insightful and honest!. Only part I didn't like was the last sentence (5 lines)!. You could delete them and keep the best of the poem!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

uhmm its good its original
the only part i dont like is whenever you start at the last five lines
try re doing that partt or just taking it out!.
but overall its good!.!.iLikeit:]
But why nigerian and ghanian girlss!?!?
hope i helped:]
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I hope you dont catch he** on this one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Cute! Hope you're not speaking from experience! :-)Www@QuestionHome@Com

,,,,,,mmkay!.!.!.!.i think the girls from ghana are going to have something to say about this!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com