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Natural Disaster
by Kevin Blacker
Darkened clouds, wind and rain!.
Left alone with all this pain!.
It’s winter here without you!.

Landslides always drag me down
Trapped for days, will I be found !?
I pray for skies of blue!.

Flooded plains within my head
Tornadoes draw near, leave me for dead!.
I feel alone without you!.

Drought from tears I know not for
I’ve cried for days, I cry no more!.
I’ve made mistakes, it’s true

Hurricane waves pound on my shore
I’m drowning on my bedroom floor!.
Will we never be together!?

This natural bridge from heart to heart
Collapsed in shreds, fallen apart
These seasons last forever!.


I really really need help like identifying the literary techniques used (eg metaphors, similes, etc) as i am REALLY bad at that! and also it would be great if you could just give your personal opinion of the poem, as i am trying to compile this thing on "How different people view poems" for my english assignment!.
thanks so much!

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
hyperbole in the first stanza!.
possible personification in the third stanza!.
definite metaphor in the fifth stanza!.
the trick is to know your literary techniques!. study those, and you could read any poem through, finding all sorts of things!. i just have it a quick once over!.

great poem!. never heard of the poet, though!. is he still alive!?

answerer after me:
of COURSE there's a hyperbole!. are you BLIND!? do you even know what a hyperbole IS!?! and poetry doesn't always have to be intriguing!. you sound like a literary snob that doesn't actually read!.
okay okay, i don't mean to be rude!. it just frustrates me when people so casually write things off, especially anything in the written spectrum!. that was not an attack against you, wilson!. it was a tangent about people LIKE you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The poet conveys the devastation that heartbreak causes by comparing it with natural disasters!. This comparison also shows that heartbreak is natural, a part of life, and that we have no control over it!. Like a disaster, it wreaks havoc with our lives, makes us very vulnerable, and we feel like we're going to die from the pain!. The last stanza talks about the relationship that has been destroyed and "these seasons last forever" refers to the feeling that he'll never get over it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm studying similes and metaphors at school!.
similes are phrases that use words like or as, comparing things,(eg my class is as noisy as a herd of buffalos) and metaphors are phrases that say something is something else which is not (eg my class was a herd of buffalos) in the poem there are no similies I think, and the metaphore would probably be: I'm drowning on my bedroom floor!.
I hope that helped!. lol Www@QuestionHome@Com

Flooded pains within my head -- Collapased in shreds-- metaphor

I think that this poem is really sad, it talks about love and how its no more its gone everything dissapears within an instance!. it shows that you can hold onto things and youhave to live in the moment and not hold onto the past that things are worse before they get better!.

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there is rythmatic uses in the poem, the storms being compared to loneliness, has a tone that feels dramatic, the lack of air by the statement drowning shows intensity, word choice

i think that it is a nice poem, sorry about my grammar i'm tired!. any ways i'm an A P Lit!. student!.!.!. i think you are!? well anyways good luck!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com



I LIKE HOW YOU USED THE DESCRIPTION OF THE SEASONS-ALONG WITH YOUR EMOTION,AND FEELINGS!.
I THINK ITS A GOOD POEM !.
KEEP WRITTING !!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Okay, since you didn't write this poem, I feel comfortable telling you that I think it sucks!. The theme is trite, the literary elements are unoriginal, the language is boring!. There's nothing new, there's no exploration, nothing intriguing!. The rhymes are predictable!. It's all been done a thousand times before!. Further, I don't feel emotion coming out of the writer!.

As for the literary elements:

"It's winter" is a metaphor for feeling depressed without the writer's lover!.
Skies of blue is a metaphor for happiness!.
All of the "natural disasters" like tornadoes, floods etc!. are metaphors for unhappiness!. I trust you can define them yourself!.

PS: There is no hyperbole in the first stanza!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well, it uses end rhyme!. I guess you could say the weather is a metaphor for emotions!. Other than that, I don't see much technique here!. Its pretty elementary!. Line 10 is true natural disaster as far as syntax goes - an example of the lengths people go to force a rhyme!.

There are a few strong verbs here and some strong images, but there is no interior rhyme, slant rhyme, alliteration or assonance!. There is no consistent meter or rhythm!.

There may be something worth saying here, but the poet is not skilled enough yet to effectively communicate it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com