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Question: 10 points tell me what you think!?
Open souls blinded by light
to scared to get up and fight
cold and alone trapped in my mind
don't know which one is mine

empty glass broken and full
cant see a way out life so dull
smiled and winked but time was missed
hide away and laughed into the mist

time is up its time to kill
just one sip and this pill
sound of silence its such a thrill
open up its time to kill
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That was very insightful, the persona's voice is clear and you can hear the pain that they suffer!. The last stanza was chilling!.

Hope this isn't you're suicide note!. Sorry, that was a stupid thing to say but I just think it's really moving but slightly scary!.

Impressive nonetheless!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow,
i loved it, that was deep,

and that one just made think about things,

and how to idk it was amazing!.
i do get a little crazy sometimes, but hey i loved it!.

i hope you make more, and if you do!.!.!. GOOD LUCK!.
Mushu PWww@QuestionHome@Com

Nice!. I can read the anger, confusion, and pain between the lines!.

I hope this isn't a message that you are about to do something drastic that will affect someone close to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its good-
but full and dull dont rhyme totally
and why would 'empty glass broken' (good) and 'full' (!?!?) be in the same sentence
they seem like contrasting words

its really deep though which can be really hard to write about :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

ok well the first paragraph is cool but the second isn't!! the empty glass broken and full !.!.!.!.!.!. it doesnt go with the first pgraph or the last!! but is cool!Www@QuestionHome@Com

good, except the line about empty glass broken and full!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow real nice!.!.that's some deep stuff!.!.!. don't really kill yourself though k!? be happy!Www@QuestionHome@Com

can't Say i really liked it that much!. Kinda just seemed like random lines just to make it rhyme at the end Www@QuestionHome@Com

GoodWww@QuestionHome@Com

Yes suicide would be niceWww@QuestionHome@Com

kill thats what im talkin about hooah!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com