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Question: What do you honestly think about this poem!? Why!?
Color of cocoa,
Skin soft like rose petals,
He gazes at her shyly!.
She winks,
Then jesters him to follow,
A vixen with a clue!.
Like a lost puppy dog,
He chases after her!.
The sun begins to set,
Clouds flutter across the sky,
It looks like rain!.
She lights candles
In her chambers!.
Safe from the storm;
Clueless to her intentions!.
Bathwater runs,
Off come the clothes!.
His heart races;
The excitement begins!.
She then prepares
The concoction:
A light drink for her;
Liquor for him,
In goes the poison!.
He dies in a happy state!.
She feels enchanted,
Another victim
Caught up in her charm!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Your fifth line should read "Then gestures him to follow,"!. Startling in and of itself does not poetry make, but don't dispose of it!. Learn more of the craft of poetry, renovate it, and resurrect it as something grander and more befitting your intentions!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I see effort, and some good points though as a whole it dosent quiet come together, maybe you could edit a few things!? A little creepy in the poisioning but I realize that a lot of good poems, stories, and movies are on the creepy side!.!. Just proof read it a little and see if you can get the stanza's to come together better and you might really have something there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Confused !

Whenever I read a English poem, i get confused!. !. !.

Except!. !. !. "humty dumpty had a great fall" :pWww@QuestionHome@Com

Man-hater, a little psychotic!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it definitely sucks!.!. but its good anywayWww@QuestionHome@Com

eh! old story!. poems are supposed to rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com