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Question: I wrote this for my English class, Oppinions!?
So it's not really poetry, But it's short, And it kinda fits here!.
Finnally, River was back; his mind renewed and his body cleansed!. He strolled leisurely down the beaten path; taking in the crisp scenery!. River lingered at the shore line, being pulled in by the picture-esque view!. Stones were severed from their sandy confines and floated across the glass like water!. He threw it with all his might, but the third stone skipped back!. River held the boomerang pebble in his solid grip, examining its body!. He came upon faint lettering, enscripted across the rock's skin!. Strained eyes read the words "All things come back"!. With a pained cry, Rivers past painted his mind black!. With a blank stare, and a broken heart, he sprinted back to his home, got his keys, and unlocked his car!. At a fast pace, River slid the vehical off the coast!. With one last aching Breath, River drew his pocket knife from his coat, and lifted his shirt, enscripting the words across his skin; "All things come back"!.
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I think it's great, but will you be offended if I point out a couple of spelling mistakes!?
Finally only has one n
You should use a semi colon only if each part of the divided sentence could stand alone as a sentence; otherwise use a comma!.
(beaten path, taking in the crisp scenery)
Picturesque not picture-esque
Vehicle not vehical
It's probably an accident, but you've put a capital B in breath (one last aching breath)!. Please accept this in the spirit in which it is intended and I hope you get an A!.
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I think it's good, it uses good vocabulary, adjectives and it is very descriptive!. The way you put the words together and your sentence structure is really good!. I think you'll get an A!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i think this is really good!. it has lots of great imagery nad sensory details =D
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WOW!.!.!.THAT WAS FANTASTIC!.YOU REALLY HAVE AWAY WITH WORDS!.
GREAT JOB!.Www@QuestionHome@Com