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Question: If you're going to criticize!?
then be open to criticism!. Right!? and criticize does not mean denigrate!. so i've commented on a couple poems so here's one of mine, enjoy or dont but let me know what you think
Wishing to Hate
i wish I could hate you
i have the right
you tore me apart
for years
treating me as if
i were less than
as if I were
worth less
you walked away
w/o ever leaving the room
and made me stand
there and watch
you made me watch
as you tore apart
destroyed
everything I wanted
everything I loved
everything I valued
i wish I could hate you!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
it is good!.!.!. like others said is easy to relate to… don’t like the “w/o”… would just spell it out… also didn’t like the way this bit flowed
“treating me as if
i were less than
as if I were
worth less”…
had to re-read it a few time to get it… maybe too many “as if”s or “worth less”s… all and all it is good…Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love it!. It's not the most sophisticated poem in the world, but I could completely relate!. I like the ending the "everything I wanted, everything I loved!.!.!." I'm seriously going to print it out and hang it by my window, just to know I'm not alone!. Thank you!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's a really good concept and the idea is there, i just don't think it flows enough!. try and edit it a bit and make it smoother!. good job though :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow!. Although this is not Shakespeare, you expressed feelings in a perfect manner!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
NiceWww@QuestionHome@Com
that is very sad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com