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High Holy Days
by Elaine Polin

In the tradition of my ancestors and at this holy time for me, we ask forgiveness from all those we may have harmed and we extend forgiveness to others!. The season extends, sundown to sundown, from September 20 to October 9!. Because the poets on this site have become a real community to me, I include you in my prayers!. By tradition, a quorum (or a minion) equals at least 10 people!.

In this public forum
for all the world to see,
will you be a quorum
and read these words with me!?

In this solemn, holy Season
when hearts and souls are cleansed,
I have found so many reasons
to make sincere amends:
for the low paths I have traveled
as time before me passed,
for resolutions unraveled,
as they slipped through my grasp,
to anyone I’ve ever harmed
through arrogance or intent,
with guilt confessed, my soul disarmed
these wrongs I do repent;
forgiveness now is what I ask
and offer mine to you,
and pray for strength to finish tasks
I promised I would do!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Your words took me by surprise, and life took a pause, in awe!.
at the baring of depth of soul we become in touch with humility!.
There is only one God, the God of our understanding, even tho!. we do
not always understand His ways!.
Through out my 76 years of life, I have had several close jewish friends,
I have always thought their wedding ceremony, the most beautiful of all
and any other!. Shalom Elaine and Blessled Be your holy season!.,
I read this as a prayer not a poem!.
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*bows to the lady*

Lady of light,
words that you write,
to encourage, help and bless,
I only can say
day by the day,
my joy that I have to confess!.

Harsh words will be said,
the sky will turn red,
and yes, some days there will be regrets!.
A spirit so pure,
no wrong done, I'm sure
true is the love that forgives and forgets!.

Blessed Be, Elaine, I offer what strength I have to you, and my prayers!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I, too, am not religious, but look for good in any religion; these High Holy Days in which you write about would be just that!. Thank you for sharing this!.
I know of nobody that needs forgiven at the moment--a long list of people I'd like to thank and ask forgiveness from, though!. May I join in this holy season and ask for forgiveness too!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

*hand raised!. I'm in!. Your words are worthy, their intent even more so!. I stand with you!. I just looked up the High Holy Days and it said 29 Sept to 9 Oct!. (I am not of your ancestric persuasion but hold an interest in cultural and religious diversity) are you extending the time personally!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

Not being religious I have no knowledge of this particular period of which you speak!.!.!.!.!.but, it sounds a wonderful thing to do!. I would like to be of the quorum!.!.!.!.and repent any hot, hasty words I have spoken which may have caused others pain!. Though I have nothing to forgive in others!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a very heart warming piece!. The past couple months we had a lot of disturbance around here!. Let`s start too live and forgive!. I am not Jewish but I have a Jewish friend!. She asked me many times if I would go to Temple with her, and I did!. It is such a fascinating religion!. I actually surprised myself!. After just a couple times I found myself singing in Hebrew!. She opened another door for me and gave me a wonderful experience!. I will never forget what she did for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your prayer has moved me!. It has caused me to be retrospective, honest, and search for ways to better myself and serve others this coming New Year!. I will reread your poem a number of times!. It brings dignity and enlightenment!. Your poem is perfect as it is!. Very well said!. I take it to heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I chose spirituality over religion many moons ago, this is the kind of prayer that to me means something more than asking for favours from the Boss!.

Thank you for sharing Elaine, mark me as Present!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Morning, Elaine, the only way you could improve this would be to expose it to a much, much larger crowd, then say, "Repeat after me!."
Just beautiful, I said it with you and meant it, too!
Blessings,
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How does one improve on perfection,,,,One can't
I would Love to stand & read these beautiful words with you,,,Thank You for sharing these words Www@QuestionHome@Com

No improvement needed!.I hope all who read it no matter what faith or non-believers repeat after you!.!.The message is a good one!.

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I will proudly join you, and the poem needs no improvement, it says what it needs to say!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Amen!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You cannot improve this!.!.!.
L'Shanah Tovah
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Lovely!. We will be cleaning out cobwebs in celebration of the new horizon!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

**and pray for strength to finish tasks
I promised I would do**
I am in!.
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A melodic poem filled with your heart felt words!. Very well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

First I forgive on a daily basis, you are no exception!.!.!. however I typically do not ask to be forgiven other than privately!.!.!. in the spirit of your words I will today ask the same as you have, of all persons that I may have transgressed!. It is difficult to understand those we cannot sit across the table and share thoughts, words!. In this place they often become twisted from their purpose!.

Second: By doing this you have now earned my respect because "I now know" you realize that you can wrong a person and you want to make it right even if not intended!. To be respected one must also show humility!.

Third: My spirituality allows me to be part of all religions because I take from each as I see how I can be more than what I am, and although I am not of yours as a whole it is a part of who I am!.

Selah

It should be a psalm and it is worthy of hanging on your wall!.!.!. BobWww@QuestionHome@Com