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Question: Please review my black belt Statement!.!?
A couple notes:
At my school it is required for martial artists to write an essay on a topic of their choice before they test for their black belt!. I wasn’t going to pass up the opportunity to write a poem!.

The people who will read this know me well, but for you all I’ll clarify a couple things:
Dave = my husband who started martial arts before me
“Piece of cake” = significant because it’s one of the Master’s favorite sayings



Self-Confidence

I didn’t think I could do this
I was quite apathetic,
But something seemed to be amiss:
I wished I was athletic!.

I really wanted to know what
Had Dave so captivated!.
I kind of thought he was a nut!.
I wasn’t motivated!.

I didn’t think I could go far,
But when I heard "Nice job, Ma’am!"
My confidence rose like a star!.
I had to think "Yes, I can!"

I really wanted to know why
Black belts thought I could be good,
But of course they knew that I
Could be if I though I could!.

I didn’t think I had the drive,
Courage or dedication,
But my confidence came alive
Thanks to their inspiration!.

Now confident in my own right
I suppose you could say that
I have to shine with my own light
So I can glow off the mat!.

Now in everything that I do
I too will give, not just take!.
In whatever I pursue
Anything is “piece of cake!.”Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is nice, and very inspiring; maybe I can get back to doing something athletic (well, I won't go THAT far!.!.!.LOL)!. Check the grammar in line 4; otherwise it holds together nicely!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

if you are as good of a martial artist as you are a poet we will see you when you replace ralph machio in our hearts!

LOL

It was good though, not the most moving poem but it was nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Respect is earned!. Well done both on the poem and on your imminent achievement!.

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just cos some poems rhyme
your essay does not have to
instead take your time
to savour black belt passed tooWww@QuestionHome@Com

well it means something to you,it just shows that no matter what,if we believe in ourselves,with determination and the encouragement of others who are close to us we can succeed in anything we put our minds to, i know there has been times regarding myself little words can mean so much sometimes!.i wouldn't say everything is a piece of cake,i find a lot of things difficult,but hey,i am not gonna say anything to dave lol,black belt and all that,oh well,peAce!.Www@QuestionHome@Com