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Question: What do you think of these two poems I wrote!.!.!?
These aren't professional or anything so I'm sure the way they are written could be better but what do you get from them!? The first one is called If tomorrow never came!.

If Tomorrow Never Came



If tomorrow never came

Would you know how I feel

Would it even be a big deal

If tomorrow never came

And I wanted you to know

Would you come with me

Or would you go

If tomorrow never came

Would you hold me today

Would you try to make me think

Everything was okay

If tomorrow never came

Would you take a chance

Would I be your evening romance

If tomorrow never came

Would you love me forever

If asked when you'd stop

You'd always say never

If tomorrow never came

Would everything be exactly

What it seems

But what if it did come

Would it all stay this way

Or would you go back to

Not even knowing my name



This second one is called I Could Be


I could be your everything!.

Your everything and more!.

I could be the wine

that makes you pass out on the floor!.

I could be your sunshine

on a cloudy day!.

The person who tells you what

no one else will say!.

I could be your angel

and make sure that your okay

fly above your head

each and everyday

I could be your air

you would need me to survive

I would smile just to know

that I'm the reason your alive!.

I could be your lover

the reason that you grin!.

Your desire, your one and only sin!.

I could be your everything

the possibilities have no end

and it kills me, I could be so much

but I'm only your friend!. Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I didn't see God listed anywhere in this!. I am a homosexual so I am a big sinner! Yay for sin! It seems like everyone is doing it these days!

I love you Mrs!. Vincent!. You are a great one month roommate!. You know how to not overstay your welcome ;)

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As long as GOD is part of your life,tommorrow doesnt matter------and if you are your true loves one and only earthly desire you would join in unity before GOD and no sin would be commited!. Read GODS word,live for Him, and your blessings will be many!. Trust no man--put your faith in GOD!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

love the second one!!!! Www@QuestionHome@Com