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Question: PLEASE!! Give feedback on my poem; titled Because of Love!?
You are powerful!.
You have made me afraid;
tentative
halting
and unsure
My usual confidence and buoyancy gone
All because you broke my heart!.

I no longer know how to react!.
The natural response
Not given in its usual fleeting moment;
disperses, as I have attempted to
do with these emotions that possess me,
in your name!.

I am afraid of your devastating power,
and so I live, daily, on a tightrope
Walking a delicate line,
straining to maintain
balance and composure!.

God, please don't let me fall back into
that uncertain place where my love is given
freely, abundantly and never returned!.

I would rather tread an endless life of
tightrope, and live in fear;
all because you broke my heart!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it - the power this person has had over you and the impact of the relationship is painfully clearWww@QuestionHome@Com

I don't think it needs more imagery!. I really like it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it and esp the tightrope partWww@QuestionHome@Com

it's good!
just try to add some more imagery
and it will be perfect! ;DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Not bad at all!.
uncertain places are a nightmare to deal with!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com