Please tell me what you think of my poem :)?

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Question:

"Home"

Black and blue are not my favorite colors!.

But black and blue are the colors I wear!.

I'm tired of looking through this haze!.

Someone save me, I'm drowning, I can't see!.

I live in my own world!.

I can't escape!.

I use to live in your world, but I'm lost!.

Please take my hand and show me the way home!.

Despair, pain and sadness is all that's left in my world!.

Show me the way back to the world I use to know!.

The world of love, compassion and happiness!.

I no longer wear the colors black and blue!.

I can finally see again!.

Thank you!.

This is a poem I wrote on 9/15/08!. Please tell me what you think!. Thanks to all who answer!! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I like it!. It seemed like it was going to be a depressing one at first but it ended on such a happy note! Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love is the greatest feeling,
Love is like a play,
Love is what I feel for you,
Each and every day,
Love is like a smile,
Love is like a song,
Love is a great emotion,
That keeps us going strong,
I love you with my heart,
My body and my soul,
I love the way I keep loving,
Like a love I can't control,
So remember when your eyes meet mine,
I love you with all my heart,
And I have poured my entire soul into you,
Right from the very start!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its beautiful but i got to say its not one of my favourites, you have some orthographic mistakes and the team is not very appealing to me, sorry i think its not one of yours best but its still good, it delivers the message very eloquently and it can show how you really feel, that's something i really like about your poems, they show who you are in reality:) Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's very pretty!. ^^

by the way, I like your avatar!. ^^ Www@QuestionHome@Com