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Question: For Granny!? All comments welcome as always!.!?
Wrote this after I got engaged in 1999!.
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VISIONS
Visions of life with the women I love
Sent to heal me, a gift from above
We've not quite managed to tie the ol' knot
But she's my Angel, my Princess - and exceedingly Hot!
Visions of hugs and kisses and coo
The beat of my heart as we say 'I do'
Honeymoon passions let loose with delight
Continuing forever!. No end in sight!.
Visions of travels and home-cooked meals
Puppies and candles and very fast wheels!
Finding our interests, fulfilling the same
Dressed to the hilt, a little bit vain!.
Visions of faithfulness, loyalty true
These have no equal in saying 'I love you'
Trust be our seam, we give with no fears
We'll see all our passions, our love, our tears!.
Visions of rockers in our twilight of Life
Stories of love, my woman, my wife
Old pooches lay prone, asleep on the porch
Comfortable love, the flame of our torch!.
Visions of endings, death rattling the door
And still in my heart the one I adore
A lifetime of fervor for my goddess Amor
My love will live on
for you
evermore!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Love this!!!!
It's very explainitory, it says it all!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Speaking as a grandpa I can definitely assure you not only is granny hot but she's a d@mn good cook and writer too!. She can sit in my lap anytime!.!.!. very well written fitting tribute; and be sure you take Grannyjills suggestions!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
an enjoyable read
You found a good way to include this, "and exceedingly Hot!"
But, for Granny!?!?!?
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I'm confused haha xWww@QuestionHome@Com
OOOOHHHH WEEEE, when grandpa see this!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
your giving this to your granny!?!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
As a newbie, be warned this question may be deleted - don't take it personally, it is all to do with how you frame your question!.
That said - this is like the curate's egg - good in parts!.
Last line, first verse!.!.!.!.I like, not taking this lovey-dovey stuff too seriously!.!.!.!.!.then jump to Puppies and candles!.!.!.I like the whole verse!.
Next verse is a bit ordinary!.!.!.if you left a gap it wouldn't show!. I know what you are going to say!.!.!.!.life jumped a bit quickly from the beginning to the rocking chair!.!.!.!.so how about you write a replacement verse here!? I don't expect much, do I!?
Visions of rockers - again I like this!.!.!.I think because it contains concrete images!.!.!.!.and I've got to let you have the last verse (because beneath my no-nonsense exterior I am just a softy at heart)!.
ps - I thought you meant Rockers (as in Mods and Rockers, at first!)Www@QuestionHome@Com