RATE AMATEUR POEM.... ever ?

Question: RATE AMATEUR POEM!.!.!.!. ever !?

LOVE
open eyes find someone new
but know they'll never have them
crying late at night, dying for their company
and knowing it will never come

shattered

like a million broken hearts in one
never knowing
never feeling

LOVE

I wrote it spur of the moment!.!.!. is it any good!?
1-10
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

There are some excellent things about this poem you have written!.

It's form, for one, but you might want to review your line spacing!. I would also dress the poem up by applying capital letters here and there, such as on the word "shattered" and putting a period after it!. But some of your words are very very effective, "like a million broken hearts in one" this is very good!. And yes, one can relate to your poem, that is also what makes it good!.!.!. work on it a little and it will be very noteworthy!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I would say, 7!.!.

You need to improve more!.!.
But don't let that discourage you, keep writing!.

Can you help me with mine!?
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It's got some good emotions but nothing to really tap into them, nothing to make you feel them!. Some rephrasing, metaphors, ect!. would help!. Keep writing :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

Haha!. I actually loved it!.

It was creative, and cute!. But sad!.

I'd give it an 8 =)

Keep writing!.!

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wow, ur really deep
if you practice you could be REALLY good!!!
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could u help me out!?
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awesome stuff, 10Www@QuestionHome@Com

its a 1 Www@QuestionHome@Com