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Question: Could any1 give me an opinion on my poem!?
it's just one of the poems i've written i'm aware that i'm not a professional lol but i just like to xpress my toughts nd feelings in poetry ^^ anyway up to u to judge

Hey there!.!.!.
The moment’s getting near
Lost in this world of hate

Harsh words rip right through my heart
Like deadly knives saw deep in me
Without breaking off my skin

In this corner all alone
Only dark surrounding me
And now I’ll end this misery

I couldn’t make it on my own
I just gave up living without you!.!.!.

So push this razor down my skin
And watch it rip right through my veins
The pain!.!.!.
I feel inside me
My broken heart will never mend
And only this will give an end
My final breath will be
My last apology

Couldn’t stand your words
“You can make it on you own”
Faked a smile
And left a tear behind me

So afraid you’d refuse
I love u and now you’re gone
Now I lost you
And I’ll be gone forever!.!.!.

I couldn’t make it on my own
I just gave up living without you

My broken heart will never mend
And only thins will give an end
My final breath will be
My last apology…

I’ll leave this letter here for you
And together with my soul will haunt
Forever
The last drops of blood I see
Dipping off my frail fingers
The pain has now faded away
And tonight…I die…
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You are a great poet i know because i am one two you have great metaphor,meter,rhyme and sound!. Your poem has a soul that is all your own!. you breath life into it from your inner thoughts passion,pains and desire!. Life is poetry and poetry is life!. you held the meaning of your poem all the way through!. And endead it in brillant color!. your image of the pain and heartache is truly beliveable!. your structure or stanza is not recurring but it dosint have to be!. stanza groups of lines recurring in the same pattern!. let me explain if a musician plays only by ear but dosint no how to read music they havint took time to truly lknow there art!. The same goes for poetry, learn the inner workings of your gift!. Yes you do have a gift!. And tonight!.!.!.!.I die WoW

This answer was giving by Ripster69 which is my husband, and he to is truely gifted in this area that is why he chose to answer your question!. Good Luck!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You write with passion, but I think you need to look in the mirror and smile before your next poem!. It possible that someone would take this as a suicide note and use it!. Perhaps your poetry should bring happiness to someone rather than bringing out feelings of darkness!. You can't see when it's dark!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pity it wasn't before you wrote the poem!. What a load of vomit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thats really cheered me up!
ps!. I hope its just a poem not what your going to do!Www@QuestionHome@Com