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Question: Feedback on my poems!?!?!?
Beauty is skin deep
Is an ideal that many keep
But many still can’t find
The power to be kind
Instead of reading people like a book
They judge by a quick look
Don’t think about a woman’s chest
Personality is what’s best
Never mind what’s in his pants
Just give the boy a chance
Ignore all things physical
The soul is what’s beautiful

and

I love the rain
It washes away my pain
I love a pleasant breeze
It keeps away my mental agonies
I love the snow
It hides what I cannot show
I love the sun
It lets me have so much fun

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The first line of
your first poem is true
second line many keep
is like a secret!.
It is true how people are
quick to judge without
getting to know first!. A
person should get to know
someone first instead of quick judging!.

Your second poem
talks about how much
you love the rain and what it does
Each line of the second explains why you
love the weather they way you do!.
You mention about the sun
I would say a person would have fun
in it!.
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I like them though I think you use the "I's" too much to start a line, I would suggest moving your I's further in the lines, of course you should compromise with changing the way the line is written if it sacrifices the rhyme scheme!. It's up to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The thoughts behind your poems are good!. I especially like the first one, it is true, more people in the world should think of what is "inside" people and not take a first glance and judge by looks!. Keep up the good work!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah!. Both of them r nice!.!.really!Www@QuestionHome@Com