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Question: Rate my poem!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?
I see you standing here
But you're so far away
Starving for your attention
You don't even know my name
You just see right through me but if you only knew me
We could be a beautiful, miracle, unbelievable instead of just invisible!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
5/5!

WOW!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Perhaps switch up the last line, to make it read as strong as the rest!.
the 'a' before 'beautiful' is confusing!. try 'we could be beautiful, miraculous, unbelievable!.!.!.' I think it might work better, and it would be less confusing to the reader!. And maybe move the invisible part to another line!. 'but still we remain invisible' or something to that effect!. Something that really punches the reader and the mouth!.!.!. Stay strong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah, it was pretty good!. Maybe the second last line should be two lines!? To fit better with the length of the other lines!. But its up to you!. I think its good!. ( if you wanna split the line into two make the new line start at but)Www@QuestionHome@Com

simply beautiful!
really well written and heartfelt!.
good going :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's beautiful, you are very good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!!!


(If he only knew!!!)Www@QuestionHome@Com

4 starsWww@QuestionHome@Com