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Question: Critique My New Poem: When I am Gone!?
When I am gone away
No body will cry
No one will shed tears
My cold body
Will be for nature to reclaim
The sun will rise next day
As it did for million years
The clouds will fill the skies
The rain will fall and
Moisten my grave
Our lives are small waves
That hit the ocean shores
And soon disappear
So when I go away
No body
Should cry
No body
Should shed tears


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Hey!! that was real good, i love poems like that, i dunno why!. Anyways keep it up!. Anyways, good luck with whatever ur doing :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

but you know Shakespear has written it all, look at his sonnets, Www@QuestionHome@Com