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Question: Nature's Love song!.!.!.revised sonnet!. What else can I do to improve it!.!?
I've worked hard at making changes that were suggested!. I may not have gotten them all, but I'm still trying to get it right!. I would appreciate any more suggestions regarding this sonnet!.

Nature's Love Song

Aurora's ballad wakes the sleeping Sun
and lulls the Moon to fade and sleep by light!.
The Sun sends out his morning rays to shun
the dark and melt the sable cloak of night!.
Impassioned by Aurora's blushing arcs
that cross a morning sky of palest blues
imbued with color and resplendent sparks
that arch in sinuous prismatic hues!.
The Earth is girdled in a warm embrace
that casts a glow upon the nimbus cloud!.
A lucent flush suffused 'cross Gaia's face
reflects her passion for the Sun, who's proud
to be the one to seed Earth Mother's womb
with energy to tend to nature's bloom!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You have been named well!. YOU are Aurora!. Your poem soars!. Please, do not touch it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Perfect flow, stunning imagery, captivating message!. You truly are Eos, goddess of the dawn, inspired by the muses to create such beautiful poetry!. Thank you, Sptfyr!. As I look at the overcast grey of the sky, I remind myself that there is indeed a sun behind it!.

This is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read, anywhere!. It is wrought so meticulously with a loving and lovely voice!. Each line is a wonder!. The whole is a masterpiece!. Please do not change a thing!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Please don't change a thing! This is incredibly beautiful and filled with brilliant images!. Thanks!Www@QuestionHome@Com

You parted the curtains, brewed the coffee and took me for a lovely swim with words!. I loved this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Publish it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ditto what Elaine said!.
Again, I don't see any flaws!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I bow at your feet!



Credit where it's due!.!.!.very well-crafted!. Now if only your responses to my posts were as well considered as this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com