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Question: My cousin Trigene asked if I would post her poem!. What do you think !?
hellhounds whelping,!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.why, to the moon,
why now, what has them!.!.!.!.!.asking in clear tones,
alert and baying,!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.is she near!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
She'd fit right in with my family!.!.!.!.Sherine, Genine, Trigene!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Loved it - but are you sure you want to use the word "whelping"!? That means giving birth!. Is it that just "her" presence - sends the hounds into spontaneous birth!? Suggestion: perhaps the word "yelping" would be better!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

What's this!?!?
A faceless turd!
Writhing in self doubt
clipping peanuts from the helm
as fodder for his soup!.

It definately has imagery, it has a feeling, it has clarity!.!.!. I personally do not like it, but that's subjective!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Doesn't get better than this!.!.!.unfortunately!.

That also covers he who is beneath me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

She wrote a poem to herself!? What chutzpah!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com