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Would you care to comment on the poem about a visit to the beach!?
by C!.S!. Scotkin
tropic jade water!.
dive into wet sand as one;
eyeless they peek,
see I’ve walked on!.
Sit on the sand
little crabs fiddle,
This warm sea
has noticed me
breathing her ancient
when sun sets
we breathe as one,
wait for stars
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I love it!. I really liked the part about "when sun sets we breathe as one, wait for stars and wish"!. I'm right there on the beach!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes, your poem is descriptive and lovely!.
I live there, but the water is never jade off my Island!. It is, nonetheless a reflection of the sky's moods and that is enough for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I read this several times!. And then again for good measure!.
I think it's one of those that I'll read again too!. It's really colourful and very comfortable on the imagination!.
I really liked it!.
From "This warm sea" to the end!.!.!.to me, the most powerful expression!. I loved that part!.