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Question: Feedback on my poem!?!?!?!?
You have a unique exterior
You’re so fun to explore
You can make mountains
With impressive peaks
You have a rugged surface
That gives me a tingling sensation
You have your own forests
I love to chop your wood
You have a clear path
From your incredible summit
To the main attraction
The journey was worth it
Just to catch a glimpse of your face

I tried something very different!. Any help welcome ^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very well thought out!.Good metaphors and imagery!.The reader moves along with the journey!The only thing I see you should change is the alliteration,which means the way the sounds of the words flow together!.If you just reword the "you" and"your" to another thing,this would be a great poem!.Definately not saying this isnt good,which it is,just dont keep using the same words to describe the muse of the poem!.Play around with different words,and be creative!.Like I said though,VERY well written!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't know if this is supposed to be sexual but that's what it's doing for me!. That said, I think this needs work!. I don't think it conveys the right kind of imagery to be effective--or to even be clear!. Sorry man, this is not ready for public consumption!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It was pretty good!. It got a bit repetitive though!. I think the first half or so is better than the last half!.Www@QuestionHome@Com