Does this correction of my haiku form still fit within the hurricane I call life

Question: Does this correction of my haiku form still fit within the hurricane I call life!?

I made a mistake in my previous haiku in the traditional form of writing it!. This is my second attempt!. I deleted the first because I didn't want to confuse anyone further!. This haiku is directed toward individuals and is a simple statement about saving memories, it's not a political statement or related to the news regarding the current hurricane!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Just call it a Bobku!. Here's a Jayku

Ev'ry haiku sweet
Pitter, patter little beat
A form so complete

Matters not the name
Counting meter not to blame
Love it, all the same!

Easy when one knows
Constant counting fingers, toes
(Yes, I'm one of those)

Haiku fans unite!
Just get off your !.!.!.thumbs!.!.!.and write
Now!.!.!.today!.!.!.tonight!

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The above IS KU!.!.!.the other could be considered a 'warped mind inverted haiku' (still giggling over that phrase)!. I tend to write many warped mind inverted pieces!.!.!.but they are enjoyable!.!.!.if only to me!.

Edit: Oh, and I do like your controVERY!. Now that could start something interesting!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Of course the form is now perfect
the meaning flows more clearly, perhaps,
but I hate you felt the need to delete
the first still packed a punch!

ma

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Elaine says they are called Ameri-Ku`s!. Ask her!. She will help you out!. She helps me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It can be a Ku
whether low or Hai,
don't let it worry you
go ahead and try!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love both!. The other one could be called a kuhai!. There you go a new form, lolWww@QuestionHome@Com