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Question: This is a poem!.!.!.please read and critique! thank you:]!?
fire burning in my eyes
he looks up with bitter surprise
watches the knife come down from hell
i relish the spot in which he fell

he tore my heart and ripped my soul
foiled my love and stripped my role

as a lover
as one of the heart
a heart that's split apart

tears hardly matter when you cry
for the one who would rather see you die

a lover indeed

but now i know with cheerful dread
no one can love him because he's dead

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I like the strong description in your poem, it's very detailed! Good write!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It looks like song!. Are you sure that it's not song!?Any case you have to show this poem to a composer!. It would be a very nice song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice poem!.!. specially the last part!.!. keep up the good work!.!. and i agree to the answer above!.!. it would be a great song indeed!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow it's very strong!. I like it's presence!. It's full of hatred and power!. You did very well!. :DWww@QuestionHome@Com