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Just want to know what you think of my poem!?
What ever you think, just would like to know your thoughts on my poem!.
Dreams once Forgotten
Are Dreamed Anew
A Life Once Stable
Is Found To Be Askew
Memories Of A Life
You Thought You Knew
Where Found To Be
A Dream Untrue
So The Dreams You Had
So Long Ago
Have Been Given New Life
To Sprout And Grow
To Reach For The Heavens
To Bask In The Light
To Tickle Your Fancy
To Your Souls Delight
So Dream Now
Through Out The Night
Let Your Dreams Leap
From That Place Within
To Grow In The Sun
To Never Again Be Forgotten
In The Mornings First LightWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
There is a sadness to the poem, but is because I have let a lot of my dreams disappear, so your poem spoke directly to me!.
A couple of typos!.
Where Found To Be <------ Were
Through Out The Night <------ Throughout
Why have you capitalized every word in the poem!? It makes each word equal in importance, and they tend to blast you in just reading!. Please edit your question and tell me why!.
Interesting start!. Stop capitalizing and give up on end rhyme!. End rhyme forces your word choices!. Why limit yourself to a usable word when there is the perfect word somewhere!?
Why not switch around the tired metaphors!? Use, "Soul's first light" and "morning's delight"!. Make your own fresh metaphors!. Cool, huh!?
i really liked the beat of the poem, it flowed nicely
it seems like there should be another stanza after the first one
the first stanza is like broken dreams
and the second and third are like rebirth and hope
you need one about what happened to give hope to the dreamsWww@QuestionHome@Com
This is a deep poem about dreams and the relation to life!. I enjoyed reading it and you should keep writing, because this is a good poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's a nice poem :] Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really like it,
speshally the last verse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com