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Sauna Morning
By C!.S!. Scotkin

Steamy palms, weary fronds!.
Frogs delight bromeliad pools!.
Toadstools rise in my garden
long before the Sun

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I thought this was great!. You are succinct and expressive!.

However,I think there's a problem with the word bromeliad, in the second line!. It is not a common word by any means, and you run the serious risk of losing your reader with it!. In a longer work, it would not be such a problem, but for such a short piece it poses quite a threat!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

PP: Do you know why I pulled you over, Ms!. Scotkin!?
C: No, Sir, Officer!.
PP: I've pulled you over because it is cruel and unusual punishment to write about tropical plants on or after Memorial Day Weekend!.
C: Huh!?
PP: Are you aware that it will be 49 degrees in Warroad, Minnesota tomorrow!?
C: Huh!?
PP: Please, be more carefree next time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like that it's short and to the point, but you can add more substance to it to make it more interesting, but this is a good start!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Whew, HOT!
We're enjoying the most perfect Labor Day weekend weather I can ever remember!. Seems like it always rains at least one day!.
Lovely sauna morning to you!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sunny bright, coolish morn
dewy grass invites
paper boy's aim
Sunday paper wet!


Loved "Toadstools rise in my garden long before the Sun"

Good morning, maWww@QuestionHome@Com