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Question: Do you llike my poem!?
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This was meant to be a poem
But i didn't know where to start
This was meant to be a poem
flowing from the depths of my heart

This was meant to be poetic
It was meant to sound poetic
But everything i write
Seems so damn synthetic!.

Comments appreciated! thx!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I kinda like it !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
don't stop here, see if you can do at least 2 more verses!. It kinda leaves you up in the air!. Not that that is a bad thing!. But I wanted a little more!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

How about!?

I want to write a poem,
but I don't know where to start!.
I need to write a poem
and express my inner heart!.

I want to be poetic,
but each little line I write
seems just so damn pathetic
and so weak, banal and trite!.

But I will keep on writing
'til I master this fine art,
and then I'll come out fighting
and express my inner heart!.

Something to give you a head start perhaps!?

Dedicated to hydropro!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

the 1st stanza was great! um the next one!.!.!.dont have the last word as poetic in two lines right after eachother
but i don't really understand why ur writing is like saying it was supposed to be a poem ur good at rhyming try to write about something like love or h8 thats always easier good luck!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Inspiration comes unexpectedly, I cannot speak for others but I find on some days the words flow and on others, forming a sentence a tad arduous!. Try again another day, when so inspired by life, love, living, or a need to create coherent rhyming sentences !.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

'This was meant to be poetic
It was meant to sound poetic'

Shouldn't use poetic twice

'Seems so damn synthetic'

Be better to use 'pathetic' as it sums up your effortWww@QuestionHome@Com

False, trite, self-aware and neither clever nor funny!.
Keep trying our patience!. (Strong)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Change the last word of it to pathetic and you are getting closerWww@QuestionHome@Com

It Doesn't Really Flow!. And Since When Has Poetic Rhymed With Synthetic!?!.!.!.i!.e It Doesn't

Did it mean to be a poem!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was quite good
Shows your in the mood

marks out of 10!?!?

WOW!.!.its not often I am overcome with indifference, I don't know what to sayWww@QuestionHome@Com

Nice! Well done, I reckon that came from the heart!. Keep trying!.Www@QuestionHome@Com