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Position:Home>Poetry> What do you expect at 5am?Question: What do you expect at 5am!? Oh the shame of it all I saw a maid who was comely and fair With pink ribbons tied in her curled hair!. Her beauty smote me at my first glance For to my heart she had gained entrance!. She looked at me and with a girlish smile Yet in her eyes there was a hint of guile!. As to my ear came whispers of her ploy For my comely fair maid was really a boy!. In total dismay at my unfortunate plight I went straight home a dejected ill sight!. To the stable I went, not an unusual course But in truth ’twas there I kicked my horse!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i was going to go kill myself right after i logged off of this session online!.!. this poem touched me!.!. deeper than words can say itself!. you just saved my life, and i love you for that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com haha, very good, I would just take out the word ill, It sounds fine without it, but with it it seems a bit rushed and pressured to reach the desired amount of syllables!. That is, unless you inserted a comma indicating a pause after dejected!. Or just ignore me and don't change it at all :) But really I do like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com An enjoyable poem of gentle humor and subtle turns!.!.!.pity the horse though, but my dog commiserates!. What do I expect at 5am!? From you, good spirits, graceful humor, and witty language!.!.!.I expect you to paint a picture!. You have never disappointed me, regardless of the hour!. Www@QuestionHome@Com It's so human!. I love it!. I'm still laughing!. Thanks for that chuckle!. So sorry for your disappointment!. The last verse does it all!. I'm still laughing!. Sorry to keep on, but it's amusing!. Best little poem I've read in a very long time!. Star! PS The horse will get over it easier than you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Animal abuse!!! Wasn't the horse's fault you were snookered! Very dry humor and funny! Thanks for the laugh!. maWww@QuestionHome@Com Do not kick the horse ever again, 'twas NOT his doing which duped you!.!. As for the girl, now boy, disguised with such guile Give him a smile next time you see him!. He's cleverly good at what "she" hides"!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com not a whole lot well here is a description: dark outside the window the street lights are on roads are abandon with no cars the house is silent and dark you get dressed a do your chores Www@QuestionHome@Com Robert!.!.!.you would not be the first to fall for such guile!. Very funny!. I must go now and find that song "Lola!" Www@QuestionHome@Com O, please don't kick an innocent horse just because of reality remorse! Caveat Emptor! Very witty!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Now that is a Whoa,Whoops, Need more caffeine And a smoke Must be careful, Horse will kick back--- Ouch!!Www@QuestionHome@Com To be left in bed to get kip!. Anyone that wakes me while i'm asleep, Will regret it!. good poem by the way!.!.!.!.!.!. just don't wake me up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Very cute and funny!. Shame on you taking it out on the horse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com the horse must represent you because you wouldn't kick a horse in real life!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Why kick the horse!? Great piece, but leave the horse alone!Www@QuestionHome@Com Oh, the shame!.!.!.In the stables and stalls this shall stayWww@QuestionHome@Com niceWww@QuestionHome@Com Witty indeed!!! Ha! And I thought this day would end gloomy!.!.!.not so a'tall!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com |