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Would you please share some insight with me!? !?
Don’t know what’s come over me!.!.
I want a glass of sassafras tea!.!.
When I was a child we moved to the south,
The things I that looked tasty I’d put in my mouth
There is a tree down the road away
Where I while away the summer, in play
‘T is a mulberry bush, I climb up in
The berries black and juicy and ripe
Are a delicate treat to my palate!.
Fresh watercress grows wild down in the creek
That leads to pond and good swimming
A snake swims up to me and I shriek!
!.!.Let us go further down the creek
A nice little pool has formed in the water
I fit in it nicely the water feels good
Once I cool off some we’ll walk in the woods
The woods are delightful
The sun creates lattice of light
Through the branches so wide
Walk as fast as you want
I’ll keep up with your stride
It is getting quite late, before we head home
Let’s dig up some roots of this tree
Pack it back with us and when we get home
Let’s brew up a pot of sassafras tea
You can share it with me!.
I will pour the hot liquid o’er ice
Sweeten it up some
This feels nice!.
Thank you for spending some time with me
Time to be young and foolish and free
I hope you enjoyed the tea!.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Good to the last drop!. Sweet as the honey within!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's in the journey that we share
that gives reason for us to care,
to cross the paths, take a dare
to walk right into natures lair!.
nice touch, might I have a lemonade and a croissant, while I digest the lovely poetic landscape you painted!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Thank You for the trip You transported me to those Woods Digging the roots up for that special Tea
(My Labor Day trip)!.!.Acting the fool!.!. !.And being free to do so !.!.Thank you Again for the journey Www@QuestionHome@Com
taste buds roll back the dial of time
snacky gummy worms of lime
black liquorice, 4 for a dime
Honeysuckle sips in summer
Labor Day is here !.!.!.!.!.
what a bummer!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love to take trips and your poem definitely took me on a journey! Great use of words and great flow! Keep writing, your very good!Www@QuestionHome@Com
But, ma'am, may I have a refill, please!?
It is a wonderful description into poetical words - an exhibition of pictures like, on walls!.
The taste is bitter, simply I cannot share your insight, though I use to be empathetical, or maybe this is the reason!. Cause I do prefer some optimistic hopeful poetical messages and not nostalgically dead ones!.
Probably cause there are too much words describing those pictures !.!.!.
Let's have JUST one of all:
"The berries black and juicy and ripe
Are a delicate treat to my palate"
isn't it better SIMPLY like:
"Berries black and juicy and ripe
A delicate treat to my palate" !?!?!?
Don't even say about:
"The woods are delightful" !
There may be technicques in the Poem, but sorry I don't feel it like!.
You could make into the end of the poem a better connection with the present - or isn't it right that I see it dead, without (much) hope!?
What good for a memory especially into a poem without "Life" - dead nature - there is no taste of life for me in it - or am I tasteless!?
Sorry, really sorry,
but this is for me to see in it, no